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Some people believe that every human can create art. Other people think that art can only be created by people with special talents. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In the current era, the field of
art
 is receiving a lot of attention and interest from everyone.
While
 some
people
 believe that every human can create
art
, other
people
 think that
art
 can only be created by
people
 with special talents.
This
 essay will analyze these two essays before coming to a conclusion. Let me begin by describing the fact that everyone can create
art
. In the era of
technology
 development today, it’s not difficult for us to find lessons online on the internet. Development
technology
 makes
people
 create
art
 more easily and conveniently without much effort. There are many AL software that can help
people
 create
art
 more easily,
for example
:
remini
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,
picsart
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PicsArt
,
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and pinterest
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pinterest
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Pinterest
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,
....
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However
, there are
also
people
 who believe that
art
 can only be created by
people
 with special talents.
This
 is partly true because most of the famous artists showed their talent from a young age.
In particular
, each person’s
art
 and creativity
is
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are
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 different and can’t be transmitted from one person to another,
this
 is what makes them unique.
However
, nowadays, high aesthetics are sometimes not as important as work productivity. So the works of
art
 may still come from ordinary, untalented
people
, but they have AL software to help them. In conclusion, talent is a very necessary thing for those who pursue
art
. As for those who are not talented, they can still pursue their passion with the help of modern
technology
. So, if we don’t help special talents, let's be confident in creating
art
 because we have the help of
technology
.
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task achievement
To improve your essay, add more specific and detailed examples to support your points. This will make your argument more convincing. For instance, you can mention a successful artist who started learning through online resources or specific cases of AI software impacts in art creation.
coherence cohesion
Work on improving coherence by ensuring that each paragraph flows smoothly into the next. Use more transitional phrases to connect ideas, such as 'on the other hand,' 'in addition,' or 'moreover.'
introduction conclusion present
The introduction and conclusion are clear and effectively frame the discussion.
complete response
The essay thoroughly addresses both views, showing a balanced perspective.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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