“Scientists believe that in order to protect the environment, people must use less energy in their daily lives. However, most people have not changed the way they live. Why do you think many people ? What could be done to encourage them to take action?

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fields report that
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to defend
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stability is to encourage people to utilize less
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individuals still
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to live people
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amount of
energy
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we have to find
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to reduce the price of the applicants that saves
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energy
.
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people to
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more
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price of the
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energy
. Everyone knows that
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applicants always in high prices since
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they need expensive new technology to create it.
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of
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the ecology is expensive
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those goods that
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traditional
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way
.
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, in my
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the light which is
energy
efficent
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and
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environmentally
friendly is four times
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expencive
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expensive
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to buy
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others
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finding
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energy efficient
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devices more
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affordable
to
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the public
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. To
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succeed
in
this
case government and international agencies should support the technologies that
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to
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reducing
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prise
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of applicants which saves
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the
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energy
.
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the government
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might encourage companies by covering their excessive cost and providing
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products
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effordable
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affordable
prices for residents.
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,
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obstacle that
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peoples
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people's
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ability to
using
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little
energy
for their life is
expensive
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prices which
is
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the result of costly
produvtions
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production
productions
processes. I think that
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can deal with
this
issue by lowering
th
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the
price of
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goods.
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