The pie chart below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in new zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selcting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts illustrate the online market
sales
in the categories of travel
, film and music, books and clothes in New Zealand in the years 2003 and 2013
Overall
, it is clear from the graphs that travel
and film with music had the highest proportion of online sales
in each year. Additionally
, book sales
showed an increase, while
sales
in the clothes category decreased
In 2003, travel
sales
were in first place at 36%. However
, they fell after a decade to approximately 30%. Additionally
, film and music sales
were as significant as travel
sales
, with just above 20%, but in 2013, they made up exactly one-third,
taking a significant proportion of online sales
.
In contrast
, book online sales
were the lowest in 2003, with just under one-fifth, and they presented a slight rise after 10 years, making up 22%. Although
clothes were the third significant figure in 2003, at about a quarter, and they decreased to 16%, making up an even lower fraction than book sales
in 2000.Submitted by Kawasaki on
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