The pie chart below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in new zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selcting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in new zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selcting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the online market
sales
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in the categories of
travel
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, film and music, books and clothes in New Zealand in the years 2003 and 2013
Overall
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, it is clear from the graphs that
travel
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and film with music had the highest proportion of online
sales
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in each year.
Additionally
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, book
sales
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showed an increase,
while
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sales
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in the clothes category decreased In 2003,
travel
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sales
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were in first place at 36%.
However
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, they fell after a decade to approximately 30%.
Additionally
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, film and music
sales
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were as significant as
travel
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sales
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, with just above 20%, but in 2013, they made up exactly one-
third,
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taking a significant proportion of online
sales
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.
In contrast
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, book online
sales
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were the lowest in 2003, with just under one-fifth, and they presented a slight rise after 10 years, making up 22%.
Although
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clothes were the third significant figure in 2003, at about a quarter, and they decreased to 16%, making up an even lower fraction than book
sales
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in 2000.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "additionally".
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, travel with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
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