Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there are more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment ?

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Citizens choose their shelter
according to
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their
interest
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, budget and goes on. But some citizens choose to live in a
house
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rather than an
apartment
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but some others believe that living in an
apartment
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is more beneficial.
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there are both advantages and disadvantages associated with
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topic, From my perspective,
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believe that living in a
house
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take
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precedence over an
apartment
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. First off, living in a home is more secure and private. It helps to get
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better environment to relax and other techniques for private purposes.
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; having a home which allows
people
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to walk through the
house
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premises without any interaction from others but
this
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type of advantage didn't get from an
apartment
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due to
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lack of surroundings.
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,
people
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can customise their homes by their own ideas and values in any area of the
house
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they want.
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it
difficult
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to customise apartments because of certain guidelines. An example
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this
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point is customising the paints for the wall and certain
installment
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installments
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of devices etc.
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,
the
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people
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who
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to live in an
apartment
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could
also
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have some advantages and they are as follows. Helps to interact and socialize with more
people
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around their premises and helps to have support from
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people
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more often.
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, If any function
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place, the
people
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who
lives
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around the premises
helps
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for
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arranging procedures. And
also
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helps to socialize in
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society. There are
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of advantages that living in a
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that outweigh the opposite
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task response
In the introduction, clarify your main argument more directly. Instead of stating your belief, frame it as an argument or position you will support with points.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to reinforce the main idea you are discussing.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the logical flow and link sentences within paragraphs more smoothly. Connect the points methodically using cohesive devices like 'moreover,' 'furthermore,' and 'in contrast.'
coherence and cohesion
Make sure your concluding statement not only summarizes the points but also restates your position more assertively, drawing a clear conclusion.
task response
Good attempt at presenting both sides of the argument before stating your position.
task response
Clear ideas and points are presented, making it easy to understand your argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • privacy
  • outdoor activities
  • gardening
  • customization options
  • renovate
  • structural changes
  • investments
  • appreciation/depreciation
  • maintenance costs
  • utility costs
  • security features
  • gated entries
  • surveillance systems
  • shared amenities
  • community centers
  • suburban
  • rural areas
  • commutes
  • urban centers
  • public transport
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