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Although there are a lot of translation software available, learning a language could still be advantageous. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#translation #software #language
With the advancement of technologies that
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 interracial peoples to communicate through abundant viability of translation
softwares
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software
, others argue that learning a
language
 should not be neglected as it is essential and beneficial. The reason
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this
 controversy
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language
 study should
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continue or not
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even if
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a translating devices
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 will be elaborated on in
this
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To begin
 with, it may
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 sensible for some to believe that
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learning a
language
 can be a waste of money and effort
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 with using software for interpretations.
This
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 because these
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software
 provide high efficiency and real-time responses which
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 to be more convenient and saving costs
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while
 taking
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 for
study
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 that
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language
 require much effort both finance and time. Take travelling abroad,
for example
; tourists can use the translating apps to communicate with the
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 right away with a few clicks on the device with a small
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of
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 internet service.
Hence
, taking
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 in order to speak the
language
 could cost up to tenfold
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the internet.
However
, I personally argue in favour of the
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essence
 of
language
 learning seeing that it
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 various benefits.
First,
learning
language
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 can enhance brain activity
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 on the right side of the brain
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accounted
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 for the linguistic and speech function, as
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 one
language
require
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 memorizing
of
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words and intonation which
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 the development of the neuron to link the data together. In
this
 respect, there is
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evident
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shown
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 that
brain
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 of .
Secondly
, learning a
language
 could create an opportunity to build up a
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 relationship.
For example
, having an
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exchange
 year abroad in
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kingdom
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 with a host family, not only you can learn the
language
 from the native speaker but
also
 developing bonding with the family you stay with as well. In summary,
although
 it is undeniable that
such
 highly
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intellectual
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the
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human effort, I am of the opinion that
leaerning
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learning
language
 is vital.
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task achievement
Ensure that your introduction is clear and concise. The introduction of the essay should directly present your opinion on the topic.
coherence cohesion
Focus on ensuring that each paragraph has a clear main idea that directly relates to your overall argument. Avoid overly complex sentences that might confuse the reader.
task achievement
Try to use a wider range of vocabulary and sentence structures to improve readability and engagement.
coherence cohesion
Pay attention to grammatical accuracy and spelling to improve clarity and coherence.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion ties the arguments together well, summarizing your stance effectively.
task achievement
You provided relevant examples to support your points, which strengthen your argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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