You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. In many countries it is now illegal to smoke in public places. It is only fair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building. Do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.

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Smoking is
injuries
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to health. Smoking in
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public
area
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is strictly prohibited in most
of
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the
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countries, but
still
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some people are looking for
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a smoke
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smoke free
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smoke-free
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zone
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to
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smoke
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. In my opinion I agree that an
indivudual
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individual
shoul
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should
not
smoke
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in the common area. In
this
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essay
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I will
brefiely
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briefly
explain why I
acecpt thr
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accept the
given statement.
Firstly
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, smoking in crowded
are
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areas
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will
affects
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the
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people who
has
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have
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sevear
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severe
allergic
reaction
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reactions
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towards the
smoke
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.
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, in recent accident
were
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happpened
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happened
for
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to
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a girl who
get
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got
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exposed to
a
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vaping
that
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which
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affects
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affected
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her skin
which
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and
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resulted in rashes
in
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throughout
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all
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her body. At the same time
ciggrate
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cigarettes
is
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highly harmful
for
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to
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chilldern
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children
, where some adults are vaping even
the
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if the
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ofspring
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offspring
are
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near. Even the
smoke
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from a smoker
make
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makes
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the
near by
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nearby
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people sick and gives them a cough.
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,
most
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in most
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of the bars, restaurants and airports smoking is still allowed, but they have
a
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seperate
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separate
room
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rooms
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for smokers which they
build
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built
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with a proper ventilation system that will not affect the public or
childern
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children
. In some office
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coherence cohesion
To improve coherence and cohesion, ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and that sentences are logically connected. Use linking words and phrases more effectively to guide the reader through your argument.
task achievement
To fully achieve the task, consider addressing both sides of the issue, even briefly, to show a balanced view. Also, make sure to expand your points with more detailed analysis and examples.
coherence cohesion
The essay makes a clear stance on the issue and gives a relevant introduction.
task achievement
The examples provided are relevant and help to illustrate the points being made.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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