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The maps below show the changes that have taken place at the waterfront area of a town called Darwin between 2009 and 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The maps below show the changes that have taken place at the waterfront area of a town called Darwin between 2009 and 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The 2 maps above illustrate how Darwin’s waterfront
area
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 developed between 2009 and 2004.
Overall
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, the
area
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 witnessed radical changes with the most noticeable changes being the disappearance of industrial
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area
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areas
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 for different purposes. Meanwhile, other facilities surrounding the
lake
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 remain unchanged. In 2009, the school was built near the industrial
area
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 that contained a
lake
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 inside. Beyond that
area
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 was a convention centre,
whereas
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 next to the
area
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 were 2 swimming pools. On the left of the map was another industrial
area
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 with
bigger
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a bigger
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 space, and there were 3 houses inside. The sea is located
in
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on
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 the bottom right-hand side with the fishing
area
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 built on it. Over the course of five years, the school,
lake
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, conventional
area
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, fishing
area
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 and 2 swimming pools remained intact.
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, it was remarkable that all the industrial
area
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 was replaced by residential areas.
New
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A new
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 swimming pool was built near the
lake
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, being the third there.
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, a new building was constructed for education purposes, and 3 more houses were erected, raising the total number of houses to 6. On the sea, one new harbour appeared.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, lake with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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