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The chart below shows the total numbers of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories from 1995 to 2002.

The chart below shows the total numbers of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories from 1995 to 2002.
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The bar chart compares the total number of
minutes
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 spent on three kinds of telephone calls in the UK between 1995 and 2002: local
fixed-line
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, national and international
fixed-line
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, and mobile.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 spending on local
fixed-line
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 calls was the highest over the eight years,
while
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 mobile calls were the lowest.
However
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, mobile call
minutes
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 saw a dramatic rise from 1995 to 2002. Local
fixed-line
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 calls experienced fluctuations over the eight years. In 1995, the figure was approximately 71
billion
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minutes
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,
then
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 it gradually rose to 90
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minutes
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 at its peak in 1999. After that, it smoothly declined to around 71
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minutes
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 again in 2002. When it comes to national and international
fixed-line
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 calls, the figures consistently increased from 35
billion
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minutes
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 in 1995 to 60
billion
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minutes
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 in 2002.
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, the
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 of mobile calls had a dramatic climb from 1
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minutes
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 in 1995 to around 45
billion
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minutes
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 in 2002.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, fixed-line, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • telephone calls
  • total number of minutes
  • divided into categories
  • local fixed-line calls
  • national and international calls
  • mobile calls
  • steady rise
  • growing popularity
  • accessibility
  • fluctuations
  • predominant mode of communication
  • progressive increase
  • dramatic increase
  • communication patterns
  • technological changes
  • social changes
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