The table shows data about the average income for one person in dollars, across two different age groups: under 18 and over 60, as well as the percentage of the poor population in three states in the US, namely California, Utah, and Florida

IELTS Writing Task Chart for The table shows data about the average income for one person in dollars, across two different age groups: under 18 and over 60, as well as the percentage of the poor population in three states in the US, namely California, Utah, and Florida

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, I will try to compare the average income for one person in dollars across different

age

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groups in different cities. Starting with

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groups not the cities, aged under 18

Utah

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wins here with 28%

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the second place goes to

California

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being 17%

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Florida

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with only 1% difference. Moving on, to the second

age

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group aged over 60

Florida

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wins by 23%

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, being the

last

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city for the under-18

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group

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comes

California

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with 13%

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Utah

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being 8%. Now that we are done comparing based on the

age

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groups we are going to compare based on average income per person in dollars, starting with

California

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winning 23,000$

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with only 1000$ difference in

Florida

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then

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lastly

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Utah

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, comparing the population below the poverty line

California

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won again with 16%

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Florida

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also

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second place again being only 4% lower than

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, and

last

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place again goes to

Utah

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at 9%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, lastly".

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Introduction: The chart intro is missing.

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.

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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, utah, california, florida with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.

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7
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meeting the goal of 7 or more
4
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

158 words

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The table shows data about the average income for one person in dollars, across two different age groups: under 18 and over 60, as well as the percentage of the poor population in three states in the US, namely California, Utah, and Florida

A report indicated that many children between 7 and 11 years old watch television and/or play video games too much. How does the problem affect? What measures can be taken to control it?

in some countries, owning a house rather than renting one is very improtant fro people. why might this be the case? do you think this is positive or negative situation?