In some cities public parks and open spaces are being changed into gardens where local residents can grow their own fruit and vegatables. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Local inhabitants who live in some urban areas are changing public parks and open spaces into
gardens
to grow their food and vegetables.
Although
there are cons, I believe that there are more pros. Let's begin by looking at the disadvantages of growing fruit and vegetables. The most significant disadvantage is that
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appearance of the city, which is considered
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a modern and spotless place, will be spoiled as garden activities are quite dirty.
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, there will be dirt and mud on the street as
people
enter and
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leave the
gardens
or harvest their goods.
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, the products might not provide
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tranquility
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and a calm atmosphere because of urban life. Turning to
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side of the argument there are positive aspects of growing products. One of the main positives of growing the goods is that the inhabitants need not
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buy products which are sold in supermarkets. What I mean by
this
is that residents can save their money.
Secondly
, growing fruit and vegetables can improve
people
's farming skills, and it might invite
people
to protect their nature.
In addition
,
people
can grow plants in
gardens
in the middle of urban areas can support them mentally, and with their mental illnesses
such
as depression. Given that gardening is a calm and relaxing activity
people
can either decompress
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and
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find a new hobby when doing
this
.
To sum up
it's true that there are disadvantages of replacing public parks with
gardens
nonetheless
I believe that there are more beneficial aspects of
this
trend than its negative sides, in terms of health improvement and money saving
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