The table shows data about the average income for one person in dollars, across two different age groups: under 18 and over 60, as well as the percentage of the poor population in three states in the US, namely California, Utah, and Florida

The table shows data about the average income for one person in dollars, across two different age groups: under 18 and over 60, as well as the percentage of the poor population in three states in the US, namely California, Utah, and Florida
The table illustrates information about the mean
income
of a single individual in dollars for two designated age categories: below 18 and above 60. The table
also
shows the percentage of
poverty
in three different
states
In America, which are
California
,
Utah
, and
Florida
.
Overall
,
poverty
rates were the lowest in
Utah
and the highest in
California
.
However
, people in
California
had the highest average
income
per person as compared with the other recorded
states
. The amount of
poverty
and the average
income
per capita in
Florida
was the second highest among the recorded
states
. In
Utah
, 28% of the total population was under 18, almost double
California
's, but the average
income
was almost one-half of
California
's average
income
.The
proportion
of poor people in
California
,
however
, was 16%, almost double
Utah
's
proportion
.
Florida
's population contained 16% of under-18 individuals, the second highest state of that age group.
Also
,
Florida
had the highest
proportion
of people over 60 as compared with other
states
,
however
, the
income
average and the
poverty
proportion
were the second highest, which were 2200$ and 12%, respectively.
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