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The chart below shows the total numbers of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories from 1995 to 2002.

The chart below shows the total numbers of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories from 1995 to 2002.
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The bar graph illustrates the total
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 of
minutes
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 for three types of telephone calls (local- fixed line, national and international- fixed line, and mobiles) in the British,Wales and Scotland between 1995 and 2002. Units are measured by billions.
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, local calls had the highest
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 of
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 in the UK,
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 mobile calls the had least
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 of
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. There was a significant increase in mobile
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. In terms of local -fixed line, the
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 of
minutes
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 grew from about 70
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minutes
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 in 1995 to exactly 90 in 1999, before it dropped dramatically to around 70
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minutes
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.
in contrast
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, the
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 of
minutes
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 for national and international calls increased gradually from just under 40
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minutes
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 in 1995 to exactly 60 in 2002. The
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 of
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 of mobile calls, in 1995
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was the least under 5
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minutes
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, by 2002 it had increased significantly to about 50
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minutes
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 in 2002.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, minutes, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • telephone calls
  • total number of minutes
  • divided into categories
  • local fixed-line calls
  • national and international calls
  • mobile calls
  • steady rise
  • growing popularity
  • accessibility
  • fluctuations
  • predominant mode of communication
  • progressive increase
  • dramatic increase
  • communication patterns
  • technological changes
  • social changes
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