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The table shows data about the average income for one person in dollars, across two different age groups: under 18 and over 60, as well as the percentage of the poor population in three states in the US, namely California, Utah, and Florida

The table shows data about the average income for one person in dollars, across two different age groups: under 18 and over 60, as well as the percentage of the poor population in three states in the US, namely California, Utah, and Florida
#data #income #person #dollars #two #age #groups #percentage #population #three #states #california #utah #florida
The table gives information about
mid-rage
Correct article usage
the mid-rage
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 of
profit
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profits
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that earn
Wrong verb form
earned
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 by
people
 in their 18 and 60 in three US
statse
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states
state
California
, Utah and Florida. There is
also
 additional information about individuals who live in
poverty
 in
this
Correct determiner usage
these
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 cities.
Overall
 it can be seen that
California
 has
great
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a great
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 balance in the cases of percentages of
age
 group and high profits,
while
other
Correct article usage
the other
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 two had
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an inbalance
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inbalance
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imbalance
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 in their average portion of population in both
age
 groups ,but they can be proud
for
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of
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 their
less
Correct word choice
lower
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poverty
rate
.
People
in
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between
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Add an article
the age
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age
Fix the agreement mistake
ages
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 of 18 and 60
has
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have
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 almost perfect balance in the state of
California
 about 17 % and 13 % respectively. Residents in Utah
has
Correct subject-verb agreement
have
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huge
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a huge
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 difference in
age
rate
 about 28% of young
people
 and 8%
elder
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of elder
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people
.
In
contrast
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contrast,
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 there are more
people
 over
their
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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60 in
the
Correct article usage
apply
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Florida and 16%
people
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of people
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 under
their
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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18.
IN
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In
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 the case of income
there
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their
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higher
Add a missing verb
is higher
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 income in the state of
California
 about 23.000 $, but
also
 with
high
Add an article
a high
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poverty
rate
about
Change preposition
of about
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 16
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
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. Low income and low
rate
Fix the agreement mistake
rates
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 of
poverty
 can be seen in the state of Utah.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, california, poverty, age, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 6 times.
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