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THese days many people have their own computeres and telephones, so it is quite easyfo them to work at home. DOes working at home have more advantages or more disadvantages

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Nowdays
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Nowadays
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, working
has been
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is
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 so easy for everyone, so many people love working at
home
 because it is so
easier
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easy
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 and comforting, but other people think that working at
home
makes
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 less effect on the
working place
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workplace
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. On the one hand, my opinion of working at
home
 is so much
comforting
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more comforting
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 and easier since the roads
is
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are
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 crowded so we sometimes
come
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arrive
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 late to the
work place
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workplace
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in addition
 if the worker is a bit tired or can not drive they are not going to have these as an excuse because they can just open
thier
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their
 computer and start working.
On the other hand
, working at
home
 takes less time and effort,
besides
 it reduces anxiety
plus
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and
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 stress and makes workers more productive
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