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Take a look at the graphics and complete the task. The table and chart provide information about unemployment and owning a home in selected European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Take a look at the graphics and complete the task. The table and chart provide information about unemployment and owning a home in selected European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table and chart show relevant information on the
rate
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 of
unemployment
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 and
home
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ownership
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 (possession) in nine European countries.
Overall
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, there seems to be a correlation between
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unemployment
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the unemployment
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rate
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 and
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the home
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home
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homeownership
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ownership
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rate
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.
While
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 Italy had the highest
unemployment
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rate
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 and
home
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ownership
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,
Switzerland
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 had the lowest of the two in 2015. As for the table, the number of people who owned their own houses in
Switzerland
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, Austria, Germany, and Belgium decreased,
whereas
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 in France, UK, and Italy increased from 2005 to 2015. Notably, Denmark and Sweden did not witness any changes in
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 regard. Looking into more details, nearly 12%
unemployment
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rate
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 and 75%
home
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ownership
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 in Italy, compared to
Switzerland
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 was the lowest unwaged and
home
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ownership
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, which was close to 4% and 45% respectively. Denmark, Sweden and Belgium had relatively similar rates for both categories, 6% to 8% and 65% to 75%.
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 to
second
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the second
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 data desired to own a
home
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 during
period
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the period
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 2005 and 2015, there was a
significantly
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significant
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 increasing amount in Italy
71
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from 71
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 to 76, which was 5. It was bigger
amongst
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than
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 other countries. Followed by France and
UK
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the UK
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 around 4.
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,
Switzerland
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 was decreasing until -3. Denmark and Sweden remained unchanged.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, unemployment, home, ownership, switzerland with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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