The chart below shows the distribution of different income groups in cities and regional centres of Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the distribution of different income groups in cities and regional centres of Australia.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of both
men
and
women
in the age group of 60-64 years who are still in
employment
in the years 1970 and 2000. The percentage of
employment
of
this
age group is taken in Australia, Japan, the USA and
Belgium
. In the first bar graph which is specifically for
men
aged 60-64, there has been a significant decrease in
employment
rates in 2000 compared to 1970. Japan has the highest rate of
men
employed in both 1970 and 2000
whereas
USA
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the USA
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and
Belgium
have the lowest rate in the years 1990 and 2000 respectively.
Belgium
however
, shows a drastic decrease from 79 aged
men
employed in 1970 to 19
men
of the same category. In the second bar graph, it shows the ratio of
women
aged 60-64 in
employment
. Here, Australia and the USA have increased
employment
rates in 2000 in
comparsion
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comparison
of
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1970.
Belgium
has a lesser proportion of
women
employed, being just 8
women
in 1970 to 7
women
in 2000. Japan, again shows the highest rate of
employment
in 1970 but decreases slightly in 2000.
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