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The table shows data about the average income for one person in dollars, across two different age groups: under 18 and over 60, as well as the percentage of the poor population in three states in the US, namely California, Utah, and Florida

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the table delineates the average salary for an individual for two distinctive age groups.
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, it indicates the percentage of each group in three US states
as well as
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 the proportion of those who are in poor condition.
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, people under 18 who reside in Utal earn more than others,
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,
California
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 has the poorest people compared with the other two states. The teenagers' income in Utal is obviously more than in
California
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 and
Florida
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, accounting for 28%
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 , with only a 1% difference, they stand in second and third place, making up 17% and 16% respectively.
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, residents who are over 60 and live in
Florida
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 earn the most, accounting for 23%.
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,
California
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 accounts for 13%, and Utal for 8%. The average earning in
California
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 is slightly more than
Florida
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. In the former area, people earn 23000, but in
latter
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, they earn 22000. Utal dwellers earn less than the other two, earning 17000 each.
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, the proportion of poverty in
California
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 is 4% more than in
Florida
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.
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 the former one is 16%, the latter is 12%.
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, only 9% of Utal citizens live below the poverty line.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words california, florida with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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