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The table shows data about the average income for one person in dollars, across two different age groups: under 18 and over 60, as well as the percentage of the poor population in three states in the US, namely California, Utah, and Florida

The table shows data about the average income for one person in dollars, across two different age groups: under 18 and over 60, as well as the percentage of the poor population in three states in the US, namely California, Utah, and Florida
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the table delineates the average salary for an individual for two distinctive age groups.
Also
, it indicates the percentage of each group in three US states
as well as
 the proportion of those who are in poor condition.
Overall
, people under 18 who reside in Utal earn more than others,
Moreover
,
California
 has the poorest people compared with the other two states. The teenagers' income in Utal is obviously more than in
California
 and
Florida
, accounting for 28%
whereas
 , with only a 1% difference, they stand in second and third place, making up 17% and 16% respectively.
In contrast
, residents who are over 60 and live in
Florida
 earn the most, accounting for 23%.
However
,
California
 accounts for 13%, and Utal for 8%. The average earning in
California
 is slightly more than
Florida
. In the former area, people earn 23000, but in
latter
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, they earn 22000. Utal dwellers earn less than the other two, earning 17000 each.
In addition
, the proportion of poverty in
California
 is 4% more than in
Florida
.
While
 the former one is 16%, the latter is 12%.
Furthermore
, only 9% of Utal citizens live below the poverty line.
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