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Take a look at the graphics and complete the task. The charts provide information about people’s travel in one country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Take a look at the graphics and complete the task. The charts provide information about people’s travel in one country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart and table show the duration
time
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of time
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 taken for
travel
 and preference transports to
travel
 period 1995 to 2015.
Overall
,
traveller
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travellers
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taken
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took
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 more than 7100 miles away or it took nearly 390 hours
on
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in
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 2005.
While
,
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apply
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 65% of people were using other private transport from 2005 to 2015. Looking into more details, there
were
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 consistency
increasing
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in increasing
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 distance travelled
on
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from
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 1995 to 2005. And 2005 was the longest
distances
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distance
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 for
travalled
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travelling
 it was closely 7200 miles or 390 hours time consuming. But, 5 and 10 years after it was rapidly decreasing below 6700 miles, around 370 hours, and 2015
remaining
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 as the lowest during the period of data. Referring to the second data about
mode
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the mode
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 of
travel
. More than 60%
people
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of people
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 prefer using other private transport to
travel
. Followed by walking or cycling 24% to 28%. Public transportation was the unpopular mode of
travel
, around 9% to 11%
people
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of people
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choose
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chose
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 public transportation for travelling.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words travel with synonyms.
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