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You live with your old grandmother. However, you will have to leave her alone for a week next month as you have to go out for official work. You decide to call your cousin to come and spend some time with her in your absence. In your letter, include: For how long you will be out Medication and special care of your grandmother Some other important instructions

#grandmother #week #month #work #cousin #time #absence #medication #care #instructions
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Dear Jason, I
Hope
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 you and the family are in the pink of health. I am writing
this
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 letter to request you to house sit my flat and take care of grandmother in my absence. I will be out of town for the fortnight as sudden office responsibilities have come up. I will be travelling to the New town and
stay
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staying
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 there for two weeks.
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 I will
in
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be in
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 touch with you on the mobile
and
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apply
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you can contact me on whats app in case of emergency.
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, let me remind you that grandmother is on medication and she takes regular medication on
daily
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a daily
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 basis in the morning and the evening.
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 to that she takes a siesta in the afternoon for three hours.
Some time
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Sometimes
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 her
knees
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knee
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 pain
get
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worsen
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 so you need to use ointment prescribed by
doctor
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a doctor
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 on her knees.
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, you need to take care of my flat too. In case of
emergency
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emergency,
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 you can call security on 88888. They will help you out regardless
the
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of the
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 nature of
situation
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the situation
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 you are facing.
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Also
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Also,
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 you need to water the plant on
daily
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a daily
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 basis. Hope you will take care of
grandmother
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your grandmother
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. Yours truly, Mark Wood
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suitable writing tone
Make sure to have a more formal and consistent tone throughout the letter. This helps in conveying respect and clarity.
single idea per paragraph
Ensure each paragraph introduces a single idea and related details to improve readability and cohesion.
complete response
The letter covers all required points - duration of absence, medication and special care for grandmother, and other important instructions.
greeting and closing
Proper greeting and sign-off are used, creating a respectful and familiar tone.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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