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The diagram below shows the life cycle of a lady bird and its anatomy. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the life cycle of a lady bird and its anatomy. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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A presentation of a species called Lady Bird's evolution through different stages in life. It
also
present
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 the different
part
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parts
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 of its anatomy.
First,
after mating, the Bug Lady produces numerous
number of
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eggs for about that
has
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 to survive for about 2-5 days.
Afterward
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, it will hatch and grow to the Larval stage and survive for 21
sdays
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days
. After proceeding, it will find a comfortable and sustainable part of a leaf to attach itself to form Pupa and
stays
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 there for a week.
Lastly
, without any alterations, it will
succesfully
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successfully
becomes
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 an adult and ready to survive and fly. A formed adult Bug Lady has
head
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 that consists of different parts that help them hunt food. It has
the
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 Antenna that vibrates when there's a signal coming from
certain
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a certain
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 stimulus
along with
 the two pinpoint eyes and the Pronotum. The Red Elytra helps these bugs to be visible due
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it
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 vibrant
color
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 with clustered black points around it and a protective layer that covers the wings. The wings under the Red Elytra help to ascend to different places. The six Legs
in
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 both sides
helpsin
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help in
 crawling and turning to rough and slippery ground conditions. And
lastly
, it has an abdomen
that is
 made for
excretion
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the excretion
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 of its
feces
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faeces
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "lastly".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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