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The diagrams below show how houses can be protected in areas which are prone to flooding.

The diagrams below show how houses can be protected in areas which are prone to flooding.
The following diagrams illustrate about
mechanism
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the mechanism
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 used for household protection in
an
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apply
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two different areas that
prone
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are prone
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 to flooding.
Overall
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, it can be clearly observed that an area
that
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apply
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near
mountain
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the mountain
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 experienced an internal runoff,
whereas
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 that of the other in a plain does not require a stop bank.
However
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, it is interesting to note whether there is a
stopbank
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 or not the construction of a building is the same. Starting with,
according to
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 the plan, it shows both alternative
option
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options
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 of flood protection: the inclusion and exclusion of the
stopbank
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. For the former, the
stopbank
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act
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acts
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 as a barricade and
high
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is high
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 enough to prevent the residential areas from a predicted century-period
water
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 level.
Also
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, it
accompanied
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is accompanied
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with
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by
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 a long passage known as
berm
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a berm
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 and floodgate beneath its base,
chanelling
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channelling
 and allowing
water
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 from the internal runoff and ponding to escape out of the city.
Hence
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, the latter design, a
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stopbank free
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stopbank-free
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 design just
let
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lets
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 the
water
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to
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apply
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flow without any hindrance. In regards
with
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to
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the bulding
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bulding
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building
 structure, the house is planned to
raised
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be raised
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 above the ground level which is about 30 cm. over the foresee
water
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 level.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words stopbank, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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