The diagram below shows the water cycle, which is the continuous movement of water on, above, and below the surface of the earth.

The diagram below shows the water cycle, which is the continuous movement of water on, above, and below the surface of the earth.
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The graph presents the
water
cycle, which is the constant movement of
water
on, above and below the surface of the Land. It is
apparently
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seen
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that the chart has three main stages in the
water
cycle.
This
natural table starts with
evaporation
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the evaporation
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of
ocean
water
and finishes with
turnig
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turning
back into the
ocean
again.
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the
beginig
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beginning
, 80% of
water
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the water
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evaporates from the
ocean
to the atmosphere by heat from the
sunrays
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sun rays
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. For the reason that
,
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it is much colder up in the air than on the ground.
Consequently
the invisible steam there turns into droplets of
water
. There are significant droplets,
therefore
they
formation
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clouds.
In addition
, at the final stage, rainwater can be
channeled
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in various ways,
for example
, into lakes or back into the sea through "surface runoff". One of the other ways is to seep into the ground and
then
reach it just before the groundwater enters the
ocean
to complete the cycle.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, ocean with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the seventh paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • evaporation
  • transpiration
  • condensation
  • precipitation
  • aquifers
  • percolation
  • surface runoff
  • replenishing
  • infiltrates
  • atmosphere
  • vapor
  • liquid
  • cycle
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