The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000.

The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000.
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the employment percentages of
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and
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aged 60-64 in Australia, Japan,
USA
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the USA
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,
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and Beigium
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Beigium
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Belgium
for the years 1970 and 2000.
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, quantity of
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male
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employees is higher than women employees, in all
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four countries and in 1970 and 2000.
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, the chart shows that
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of workers in Japan and Beigium
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male
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than
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female.
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, indicators of Japan in 1970 and 2000
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84% and 76%, respectively. And percentages of employment in
Beigium
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Belgium
in 1970 and 2000 is 79% and 19%, respectively.
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