The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000.

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the employment percentages of

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aged 60-64 in Australia, Japan,

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and Beigium

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Beigium

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Belgium

for the years 1970 and 2000.

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, quantity of

men

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employees is higher than women employees, in all

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four countries and in 1970 and 2000.

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of workers in Japan and Beigium

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, indicators of Japan in 1970 and 2000

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84% and 76%, respectively. And percentages of employment in

Beigium

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Belgium

in 1970 and 2000 is 79% and 19%, respectively.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

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The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000.

Nowadays many people choose to be self employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. what could be the disadvantages of being self employed?

Many people use social media every day to get in touch with other people and news events. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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There is no doubt that globalisation has benefited the world by bringing together people, business and nations. People who criticise it stand in the way of progress. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

While many people go to university for academic study, more people should be encouraged to do vocational training because there is a lack of qualified workers such as electricians and plumbers. Do you agree or disagree?