The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000.
The given
stastic
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statistic
statistics
static
illustrate
the employment percentages of Correct subject-verb agreement
illustrates
male
and Fix the agreement mistake
males
female
aged 60-64 in Australia, Japan, Fix the agreement mistake
females
USA
, Correct article usage
the USA
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and Beigium
Beigium
for the years 1970 and 2000. Correct your spelling
Belgium
Overall
, quantity of men
employees is higher than women employees, in all Correct your spelling
male
of
four countries and in 1970 and 2000.
Change preposition
apply
Firstly
, the chart shows that number
of workers in Japan and Beigium Change the article
a number
the number
increasingly
male Add a missing verb
is increasingly
that
female.
Correct word choice
than
For example
, indicators of Japan in 1970 and 2000 is
84% and 76%, respectively. And percentages of employment in Correct subject-verb agreement
are
Beigium
in 1970 and 2000 is 79% and 19%, respectively.Correct your spelling
Belgium
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