The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000.

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the employment percentages of

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aged 60-64 in Australia, Japan,

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and Beigium

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Belgium

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employees is higher than women employees, in all

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four countries and in 1970 and 2000.

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of workers in Japan and Beigium

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, indicators of Japan in 1970 and 2000

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84% and 76%, respectively. And percentages of employment in

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Belgium

in 1970 and 2000 is 79% and 19%, respectively.

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Some people think that a person improves their intellectual skills more when doing group activities. To what extent do you agree? Use specific details and examples to explain your view.

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