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The Chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The Chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
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The bar chart shows the survey of 4 weeks
percentage
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 consuming
coffee
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 and
tea
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by
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in
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 five different
cities
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 from Australia
along with
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type
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the type
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 of habits to purchase them.
Overall
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,
people
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 visiting café for
tea
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 or
coffee
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 always
stays
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stay
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in
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at
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 the top
compare
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compared
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 to the
people
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 having fresh and
instant
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coffee
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 in the
last
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 4 weeks except in Adelaide.
People
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 having
instant
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coffee
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 and visiting café for
tea
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 or
coffee
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 here
seems
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seem
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 to be very slightly greater in
percentage
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 compared to visiting café.
Whereas
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residents
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 having fresh
coffee
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seems
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seem
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 to be low in
percentage
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compare
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compared
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 to
other
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the other
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 two habits regardless of any five
cities
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. In
Syndney
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Sydney
,
Melbourne
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 and
Hobart
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residents
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 visiting café for having
tea
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 and
coffee
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 always stayed
in
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at
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top
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the top
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 with huge difference
compare
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compared
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 to
other
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the other
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 2 habits which
is
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are
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 almost above 60
percent
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per cent
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 where
Melbourne
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 and
Hobart
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reaching
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reached
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highest
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a highest
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percentage
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 of approximately 63%.
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contrast
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contrast,
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people
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 having
instant
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coffee
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 always stayed in the 2nd position in these
cities
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 by reaching almost 55% in
Hobart
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, below 50% in
Melbourne
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 and almost 45% in Sydney. Having fresh
coffee
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 always
remind
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reminds
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me in
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in
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of
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 the
last
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 which is below 45% in Sydney and
Melbourne
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 and less than 40% in
Hobart
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. The
percentage
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 difference between
instant
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coffee
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 and visiting café by the
people
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 stayed relatively low in Brisbane and Adelaide. By reaching in and around 55% and approximately 53%
by
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of
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residents
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who
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apply
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visits
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visit
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 café and
having
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have
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instant
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coffee
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. But in
the
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apply
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Adelaide
in
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apply
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the only city where
people
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having
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have
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instant
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coffee
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 was slightly higher by almost 1 or less than 1
percent
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per cent
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. In both
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cities
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cities,
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residents
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 having fresh
coffee
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 remained always in the 3rd position with less than 35%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, coffee, tea, cities, people, café, instant, residents, melbourne, hobart with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stays" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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