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The Chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The Chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
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The bar chart shows the survey of 4 weeks
percentage
 consuming
coffee
 and
tea
by
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in
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 five different
cities
 from Australia
along with
type
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the type
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 of habits to purchase them.
Overall
,
people
 visiting café for
tea
 or
coffee
 always
stays
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stay
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in
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at
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 the top
compare
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compared
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 to the
people
 having fresh and
instant
coffee
 in the
last
 4 weeks except in Adelaide.
People
 having
instant
coffee
 and visiting café for
tea
 or
coffee
 here
seems
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seem
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 to be very slightly greater in
percentage
 compared to visiting café.
Whereas
residents
 having fresh
coffee
seems
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seem
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 to be low in
percentage
compare
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compared
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 to
other
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the other
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 two habits regardless of any five
cities
. In
Syndney
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Sydney
,
Melbourne
 and
Hobart
residents
 visiting café for having
tea
 and
coffee
 always stayed
in
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at
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top
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the top
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 with huge difference
compare
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compared
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 to
other
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the other
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 2 habits which
is
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are
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 almost above 60
percent
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per cent
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 where
Melbourne
 and
Hobart
reaching
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reached
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highest
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a highest
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percentage
 of approximately 63%.
In
contrast
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contrast,
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people
 having
instant
coffee
 always stayed in the 2nd position in these
cities
 by reaching almost 55% in
Hobart
, below 50% in
Melbourne
 and almost 45% in Sydney. Having fresh
coffee
 always
remind
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reminds
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me in
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in
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of
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 the
last
 which is below 45% in Sydney and
Melbourne
 and less than 40% in
Hobart
. The
percentage
 difference between
instant
coffee
 and visiting café by the
people
 stayed relatively low in Brisbane and Adelaide. By reaching in and around 55% and approximately 53%
by
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of
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residents
who
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apply
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visits
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visit
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 café and
having
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have
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instant
coffee
. But in
the
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apply
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Adelaide
in
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apply
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the only city where
people
having
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have
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instant
coffee
 was slightly higher by almost 1 or less than 1
percent
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per cent
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. In both
cities
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cities,
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residents
 having fresh
coffee
 remained always in the 3rd position with less than 35%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, coffee, tea, cities, people, café, instant, residents, melbourne, hobart with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stays" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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