The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarize this information by selecting and reporting the main feautures and make comparison where relevant.

The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities.

Summarize this information by selecting and reporting the main feautures and make comparison where relevant.
The line graph and table demonstrate the typical temperatures in each month and the figure for hourly sunrise per year in three big cities. It is apparent that the cold
whether
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weather
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are
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observed in
London
and New
York
at the initial and
at the end
of the year.
While
the median
hours
of sunshine in New
York
is the highest, the figure for
London
is the lowest. In January, the number of temperatures in Sydney,
London
and New
York
is around 25, 8, and 6 respectively. The figure for
London
and New
York
intercepts
at the end
of March
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approxiamtely
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approximately
12. Both amount of temperatures reach
its
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peak in July at nearly 23 and 30, before declining significantly to 10 and 5 in December respectively. But the amount of temperature in Sydney fluctuates between around 25 and 20 throughout the year. Regarding the annual
hours
of sunshine, New
York
has the highest number,
accouting
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accounting
for 2535
hours
.
While
Sydney is the second most, 2473
hours
,
London
is the lowest, representing 1180
hours
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, while".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words london, york, hours with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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