The graph below shows the consumption of 3 spreads from 1981 to 2007.

The graph below shows the consumption of 3 spreads from 1981 to 2007.
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The given graph depicts the consumption of three spreads namely(margarine, low fat and reduced spreads and butter)in 1981 and 2007 Inclusively,the consumption of butter
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higher than other spreads, except margarine
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figure underwent a declining trend. On the whole, at the beginning period the fraction of
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higher than others at over 140
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it jumped to 160 in 1986.
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there was a dramatic dip by around 105
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from 1986 to 2007 and when ceased at nearly 55
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margarine stood at approximately 90
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it fluctuated slightly to 100 in 1991.After fluctuating, it remained the same until 1996 and by 2007
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figure continued a considerable decline of 60
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.Low fat and reduced spreads
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been consumed since 1996 and it started the period at over 15
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sharp improvement in the consumption of the low fat and reduced spreads to nearly 80 till 2001 and.In 2007 it faced a dropping trend from 80 to roughly 75
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Vocabulary: Replace the words grams with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • spreads
  • increased
  • decreased
  • stable
  • significantly
  • approximately
  • per capita
  • remarkable
  • peaked
  • experienced
  • started
  • remained
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