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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagrams illustrate information about the change
of
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the center
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center
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library
 after 20 years.
Overall
, there is no change
about
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 the area and entrance,
however
 the location of
room
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the room
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 in
central
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library
 today has undergone a complete transformation compared to its map 20 years ago. Two decades ago, as one entered the
library
,
reading
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room
situated
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 on
left
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the left
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 side, where customers
accessed
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to
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newspapers and magazines but it has been now replaced by
computer
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a computer
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room
. To the right, there was an enquiry desk in which people could buy tickets, return
book
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books
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, etc... Now it has been
tranformed
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transformed
 into a cafe. Meanwhile, the adult fiction
books
 have been located
to
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 the right-hand side of the
room
, which
are
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is
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 located between two rooms of
library
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the library
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, making way for all reference
books
. Three self-service machines and
information
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an information
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 desk are
equiped
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equipped
 in front of adult fiction
books
. In the middle of
library
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the library
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, tables and chairs have been removed to open space
nearly
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 the entrance.
Finally
, the back section of the
library
 has significant alterations, with the
room
 in
left
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 corner that
accomodated
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accommodated
accommodate
accommodates
 CDs, videos and computer games being enlarged to fiction
books
 for children and two sofas.
Moreover
, storytelling events
also
 are organized
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there. And there is a lecture
room
 in the back right-hand corner where children’s
books
 used to be
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words library, room, books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • layout
  • reading area
  • computer station
  • multimedia section
  • children's area
  • reference section
  • study cubicles
  • shelving units
  • digital media
  • technological advancements
  • user behavior
  • accessibility
  • traffic flow
  • modernization
  • community needs
  • conversion
  • allocation
  • removal
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