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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The atlas
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the evolution of the valley of Ryemouth
during
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from
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 1995 and now. In 1995 , there was a jungle park near a plantation
in
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on
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 the east
side
 , which was habitation in opposite
of
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apply
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it.A long
road
 ran
throught
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through
 the
center
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centre
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 of the village , diving it into the west
side
 and
and
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east
side
 , from the western area , there were many shops facing to fish mart near the ocean . the southern
side
 of the vale was a coastline that featured a fishing
harbor
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,
there
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and there
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a
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was a
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small café in front of the sea . Across the
road
 from the café , was a hotel . In the present , there
are
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is
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evolution
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an evolution
the evolution
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 of
the
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apply
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Reymouth town
due to
 urbanization, there have
a
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modern
accommodation
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accommodations
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such
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as
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sport
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sports
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 clubs like
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a
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golf park and tennis court
instead
 of farmland ,
increasing
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an increasing
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 of residential
place
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places
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 facing the
sport
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sports
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 clubs , the forest are are no longer exist .
while
 the central
road
 still remained , along
this
road
 to the seacoast ,there are many flats by the
side
 of
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the
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beach and Bistro
are
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fronting . the hotel has been upgraded with a new car park
beside
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 . In summary, the village of
Ryemouth
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Tynemouth
 has become more modern and urbanized, with increased housing, sports facilities, and restaurants.
However
,
this
 development has come at the cost of natural areas.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words side, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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