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The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
This
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 diagram demonstrates Ryemount’s map between 1995 and the present map. It shows the village as a rural
area
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 located near a beach with a few
building
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buildings
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. The 1995 village map showed
this
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 city as a rural
area
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 on the east with a large forest park and an agriculture
area
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 on the northeast.
Moreover
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, the living part was on the north and west, with
had
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apply
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a few single houses and a road passing these houses.
In addition
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, the fish market was located near the beach, which had a fishing port, four boats, and shops opposite the market.
However
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, Ryemount in the present day has significant changes to a suburban village that developed many infrastructures
such
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 as the farmland in the north is developed into a golf yard with two tennis courts in the south.
In addition
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, the fish market is replaced by apartments, and the shops are changed to a restaurant
area
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 with the disappearing
harbor
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harbour
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.
Although
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 the city has built many infrastructures, the hotel and cafe have constantly located
on
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in
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 the southeast since 1995 with a car park is on the present day.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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