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The graph illustrate predictions about the number of students for three major world languages over a ten year period between 2020-2030.

The graph illustrate predictions about the number of students for three major world languages over a ten year period between 2020-2030.
Overall
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, what stands out from the
graph
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 is that there will be a steady rise in the
number
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 of
students
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 for all of the
three
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 major
languages
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 over the time period covered by the
graph
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.
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, the
path
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 for them are completely different. Looking at the
graph
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, as regards the
number
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 of
students
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 for
spanish
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Spanish
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, there will be a rise from 200
million
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 to
near
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 300
million
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 in the first
two
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year
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years
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, but in the next
two
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year
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years
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it’s
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 expected to level off at 300
million
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.
While
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 the
number
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 of
students
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 for
Mandarin
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 is expected to grow dramatically from 100
million
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 to
near
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 300
millon
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million
 in the first four
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year
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years
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.
Following
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this
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, the figure for Spanish and
Mandarin
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 will
increase
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 gradually between 2024 to 2026 and both of them reach
to
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about 350
million
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 and
this
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 is the point that
Mandarin
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 surpasses Spanish in the
number
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 of
students
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According to
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 the
graph
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 the
number
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 of
students
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for
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Mandarin
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 will rocket between 2026 to 2028 and
it’s
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 likely to
increase
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 by 150
millions
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 to reach 500
million
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students
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it’s
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 the largest
increase
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 in the
number
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 of
students
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 between these
three
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languages
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 in the
graph
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 over a
two
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year
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 period. Another interesting point is that the
number
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 of
students
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 for
Mandarin
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 is expected to
increase
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 by 50
million
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 on average each
year
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 which in
this
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 matter
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it’s
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 the largest
number
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 between these
three
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languages
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On the other hand
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, the
number
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 of
students
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for
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English
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 is starting at about 550
million
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 and
it’s
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 expected to have a steady rise to
near
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nearly
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 700
million
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 in the first four
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year
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years
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.
However
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, unlike the other
two
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languages
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languages,
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 the
number
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 of
students
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for
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in
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English
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 is expected to decrease to
near
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nearly
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 600
million
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 between 2024 to 2026 which
it
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makes
the
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English
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 the only language
between
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among
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 these
three
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 that will experience decreasing in the
number
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 of
students
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Following
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this
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, the
number
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 of
students
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for
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in
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English
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 will grow steadily between 2026 to 2030 and
it’s
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 likely to peak at about 750
millions
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million
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, which
it’s
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 the largest
number
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 of
students
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 between these
three
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languages
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "following this, however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, number, students, three, languages, million, two, year, it’s, mandarin, increase, english with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 12 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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