The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the process of
honey
-making by bees
, which involves three important stages, including building a nest, collecting nectar, evaporating, and producing honey
.
In general, honey
production consists of several steps, and it starts with bees
that construct hives with hexagonal-shaped cells as a place to prepare honey
and also
a place to produce honey
. After that, the insects leave their nests and fly to search for fresh flowers to collect nectar, which is very important in making honey
.
After that, the bees
return to their hive, they will flap their wings on the cells, which causes the air to evaporate through the water in the nectar turning into gas. As a result
, honey
is produced and ready to be served and packed in a glass jar.
In conclusion, the process of making honey
bees
is a simple one that is
done naturally in a certain period of time.Submitted by riani.the2 on
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