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the global warming is a biggest problem for our environment. People should work on environment to solve this global issue.

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It is an undeniable fact that global warming is
a
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 biggest problem for our
environment
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.
People
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 should work on
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environment
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 to solve
this
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 global issue. There are a lot of reasons for
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 cause and solutions, which we will discuss
into
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 upcoming paragraphs.To commence with,
growing
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 population
world wide
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 is
a
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 biggest reason for global warming. To
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 a point,
people
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 start cutting
trees
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 for homes and food with the increment in population even some
people
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 export wood from cutting
trees
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 as export for business.
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 of cutting
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trees
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people
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 should grow more
trees
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. If they need land for homes, they should plant new
trees
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 on the free land and water them until they become
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tree
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.
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, in Germany, if individuals have to cut any tree for any purpose, they plant another tree at a time to protect the
environment
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 from global warming.
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, every single person wants their own vehicles, which produces
pollutions
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. So,
this
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 is the biggest threat
for
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 global warming.
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, to meet the demands of
growing
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a growing
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 population, they need money. So, they started factories and industries.
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, the waste from factories and industries can cause water, land and
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environment
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 pollution. To solve
this
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 threat
people
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 should follow
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environment save
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environment-saving
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 programs,
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also
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and also
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 try to use
plant based
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plant-based
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 or cotton clothes
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 of polyesters.
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, Canada is the most plant-based
fiber
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 used country, they tried to save
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environment
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 from
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 threat.
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it
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, it is crystal clear that if individuals will understand the values of
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environment
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 and the harmful effects of
this
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 problem, they will save it.
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, it will destroy the full natural habitat and human
livings
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 one day. So,
people
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 should be aware
about
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 it and they have to promote forestry missions.

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task achievement
Your essay clearly addresses the problem of global warming and its causes, but it can benefit from a more structured approach. Ensure each paragraph sticks to a single main idea and develops it fully before moving to the next.
task achievement
Be careful with grammar and word choice. Phrases like 'a biggest problem' should be corrected to 'the biggest problem.'
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow between points. Transition words and phrases can help to link your ideas more smoothly. For example, 'Additionally,' could be replaced with 'Furthermore,' or 'Moreover,' to show an addition to a previous point.
coherence cohesion
Incorporate more varied sentence structures to enhance readability. Try to mix short and long sentences to maintain the reader's interest.
task achievement
You have made a good effort to cover a broad range of relevant points to support your argument.
task achievement
Strong conclusion that effectively summarizes your key points and provides a clear closing.
relevant specific examples
Good use of examples, such as the reference to Germany and Canada, to back up your points.
introduction conclusion present
Introduction effectively sets the stage for the discussion and establishes the importance of the issue.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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