Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The financial
situation
in countries
can be categorized into developing countries
and developed countries
. But
, developing Correct word choice
However
countries
will not forever be in the same category as they will always try to grow their situation
with the goal of reaching the status of a developed country. This
is where developed countries
should be providing help to any neighboring
developing Change the spelling
neighbouring
countries
in terms of development
projects.
Development
projects are usually initiated by at least two countries
to find balance in both of
their Change preposition
apply
economical
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economic
situation
and just for the sake of peacekeeping and humanity. If we're looking from the side of developing countries
, we can receive many helps
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help
such
as financial aid and if we're lucky, we can be shifted into a better country systematically. In comparison to that, there might seem not a lot of benefits can be found from the developed countries
, but politically this
is where they can find mutual cooperation for future relationships.
In the harsh truth, even a development
project can not actually solve poverty issues that appear mainly in developing countries
. But let's look at it in another way–which is from the side of humanity. Honestly speaking, poverty issues may not only rooted
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be rooted
from
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in
economic
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the economic
situation
of a country,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
from
how they treat those facing the Change preposition
in
situation
. Imagine it this
way, even if you're still living in poverty, but
what if your living Correct word choice
apply
situation
has increased due to
help from the government? And that's how development
projects can be effective. Instead
of just giving financial aid, most of them also
involved Add a missing verb
are also
on
how to make the living Change preposition
in
situation
better.Submitted by annisaseptidwiyanti on
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The essay attempts to address the prompt by discussing various types of aid and their impact.
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You have some good ideas about development projects and their potential benefits.
Fully explain your ideas
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