University students should pay all the costs of their studies because university education benefits only individuals but not the society as a whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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education is more important for
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educated families
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introduction conclusion present
You should provide a clear introduction that outlines the essay's main argument. Similarly, a conclusion that summarizes the key points is necessary.
supported main points
Expand on your points with more detailed explanations and specific examples. For instance, discuss how society benefits from educated individuals in more detail.
complete response
Your response should fully address the prompt. Currently, it is missing in-depth discussion on whether university education only benefits individuals or society as a whole.
logical structure
Try to organize your essay logically. Start with your main argument, followed by supporting points, and conclude with a summary.
clear comprehensive ideas
It's good that you recognize the importance of education for society and families.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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