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The below chart gives information the data of immigration, emigration and net migration in UK between 1999 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The below chart gives information the data of immigration, emigration and net migration in UK between 1999 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram provides
immigration
,
emigration
 and net
migration
datas
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data
 in
UK
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the UK
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 from 1999 to 2008.
Overall
, both
immigration
 and
emigration
 were upward at the frame time.
In Addition
, net
migration
 had
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a change
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change
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changed
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 trend
annual
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annually
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 and had a peak in 2004. First and foremost, it is readily apparent that
people
 immigrated
in
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to
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UK
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the UK
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, which was
gradual
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a gradual
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 increase from 450 to above 500
thousand
 individuals in the surveyed times. A year later, the amount of
immigration
people
was
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rose significantly approximately 100
thousands
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thousand
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. Before decreasing
sligtly
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slightly
 to 570
thousands
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thousand
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 in 2005. In 2006, the
immigration
 population had a peak again at 600
thousand
 individuals in the observation periods.
Then
,
this
 number went down slightly
in
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apply
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2 years later.
Secondly
,
emigration
people
also
 had
uptrend
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an uptrend
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 from 1999 to 2006 with 300 to 400
thousand
 citizens.
Then
, the figures
of
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for
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emigration
 fell
down
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apply
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sharply to 330
thousands
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thousand
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 in 2007. A year later, the quantity of
emigration
people
 climbed dramatically again to reach 420
thousand
 citizens.
Last
 but not least, net
migration
 was
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alterative
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alternative
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 in the surveyed periods. It
was reach
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reached
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 a peak in 2004 at 240
thousand
people
. Meanwhile, a year before, net
migration
 was at least approximately 150
thousands
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thousand
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.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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