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The chart below shows the percentage of young people in higher education in four different countries in 2000, 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of young people in higher education in four different countries in 2000, 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart demonstrates the proportion of children in advanced education in four nations between 2000, 2005, and 2010.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the highest
number
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 was observed in
Country
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 D in all years.
While
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 the figure for
Country
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 A, B, and D depicted an upward trend,
Country
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 C showed a downward trend.
According to
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 the graph, in
country
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 A, the percentage of students in higher education increased significantly from 38% in 2000 to 52% in 2005.
This
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 was followed by a gentle boost in the
number
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 of
Country
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 A to 62% in the next five years. Regarding
country
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 C, the proportion of it illustrated a slight growth from 46% in 2000 to 52% in 2005, subsequent to which the
number
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 remained stable at 52% in 2010.
Moreover
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, the amount of
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 D rose dramatically from 64% in 2000 to 78% in 2005, before increasing by 2% in 2010.
On the contrary
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, there was a minor drop in the
number
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 of
country
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 B from 46% in 2000 to 41% in 2005, after which the figure rebounded back to 43 in 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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