The diagram below show the production of a lead pencil

The diagram illustrates the production of a lead

pencil

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Overall

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it is clear that

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there are several processes of production, which

beginning

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begin

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with

planted

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planting

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trees

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and

finishing

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finish

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with

stamped

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stamping

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apply

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pencil

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to use. The first step of

process

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the process

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planted

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to plant

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the

trees

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and

waiting

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wait

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4 months before

the

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they

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growed

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grow

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then

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they

replanted

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are replanted

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and

they growing

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grow

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apply

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trees

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around

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for around

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3 years. After 14 years, when

trees

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are thinned they are

rady

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ready

cutted

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cut

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down for manufacturing processes. The process starts with cutting wood to

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apply

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thin

stats

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stars

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then

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they treated

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it 60

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days before glued black lead to the groove.

Following

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this

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new slat

putted

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was put

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down to the groove.

Consequantly

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Consequently

this

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sandwich

hard-pressed

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is hard-pressed

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and

heating

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the heating

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process is started. After the hitting

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pencil

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pencils

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are ready to

cutting

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cut

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then

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they

painted

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are painted

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, sharpened and stamped to the box and

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the pencil

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pencil

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pencils

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are ready

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for

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sale.

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Jul 30, 2024

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
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29
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

141 words

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