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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1 The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

IELTS Academic Writing Task 1 The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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These two line charts illustrate the difference
electrical
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in electrical
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appliances's
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appliances
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 ownership during the period of time between 1920 and 2019. It
also
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 shows
account
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an account
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 of time spent
going
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doing
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 housework in households in
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a spisific
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spisific
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specific
 city.
Overall
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 , it
clear
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is clear
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 that the percentage of households with electrical appliances is having growth .
However
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 , the number of
hourswork
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hours
 in households
is
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has
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 dropped .
According to
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 what is shown , about ownership electrical appliances we can see that at 1920 washing machine
percent
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per cent
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fourty
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forty
 and vacuum cleaner
percent
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per cent
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 thirty
while
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 mostly no ome use refrigerator. Coming to 1490 ,the rate of
usung
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using
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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 has
a
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apply
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rise
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risen
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 about 55%.
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 , washing
machine
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machines
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 and vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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 get high with a ten per cent each . After two decades ,
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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