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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The map and chart below show the information for the global willingness to eat insect products and the current price for certain food available on the market place. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The map and chart below show the information for the global willingness to eat insect products and the current price for certain food available on the market place. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
#minutes #show #information #willingness #insect #products #price #food #market #place #report #university #lecturer #summarise #features #comparisons
The map below
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 the global
willingness
 information to eat insect products . It
also
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certain
 food available currently.
Over all
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, it
clear
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is clear
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 that most of the
area
percnt
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per cent
 under
fourty
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forty
.
While
 two different
area
percent
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 between 30-35 and the other few
area
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 above fifty
percentage
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.
According to
 what is shown . We can see that
both
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 USA ,RUSSIA ,INDIA ,SPIN , UK AND AUSTRALIA
willingness
 close to
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each
 other . they are all around thirty to thirty-six per cent. Next to AFRICA
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 percent 39% .
Moreover
 , JAPAN has
also
 a low
willingness
 number , it is 21%.
Comming
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 to the
high-percent
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area
 , MEXICO
acount
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account
about
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 71%
while
 PERU and THAILAND have quite
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57%. To
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 up , we could say that BRAZIL and CHINE are middle global
willingness
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percentage
 .it
almos
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almost
 40%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words willingness, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global willingness
  • insect products
  • current prices
  • marketplace
  • highlighting significant patterns
  • outliers
  • regions
  • discrepancy
  • non-insect-based food items
  • general pattern
  • comparisons
  • notable differences
  • traditional food items
  • main trends
  • implications
  • further research
  • consumption
  • price variation
  • food availability
  • significant
  • observed
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