Some people argue that spending a lot of money holdingn birthday parties,wedding parties and other celebration is a waste of money. However, others believe such parties are important for individual and for society. Discuss both views give your opinion.

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parties,

such

as

birthday

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birthdays

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,

wedding

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weddings

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and supplementary

celebration

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celebrations

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spending

vast

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a vast

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amount of

money

is a

waste

in

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the

point

of view of one group of people.

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,

other

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others

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believe it is important for

socity

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society

as well as

individual

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individuals

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.

Firstly

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believe

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lossing

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losing

money

in those events is a drawback is correct

in

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a

point

of view as many materials like

ballons

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balloons

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, candles,

foods

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food

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and so on are wasted

in

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those occasion

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that occasion

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. Misuse of

such

thing

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things

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in the name of

celebration

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celebrating

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in

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apply

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waste

while

distribution

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distributing

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of

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those things to the poor can be

a

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done

instead

of wasting it.

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,the

waste

of

money

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such

a

celebration

is

also

waste

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a waste

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of time

while

it

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productive things can be done

instead

of attending those celebrations.

While

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,

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the opposing faction

believe

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believes

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that

these

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this

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celebration

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celebrations

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is

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are

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ones

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once

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in a

while

or

ones

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once

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in a lifetime

celebration

so the

money

spend

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spent

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it is worth.

As

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These

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these kind

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this kind

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of events bring together the members or people to each other.

Also

, makes a lifetime memory that can be

share

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in future and can

also

refresh

ones

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memory remembering it. In my

point

of view,

that

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these events can be memorable but if the celebrations can be held using only

small

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a small

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amount and

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the remaing

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remaing

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remaining

can be given to needy people or can be saved for the future. Both

groups

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group's

groups'

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views are correct in some

way

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ways

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and

also

wrong in

other

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another point

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point

.