The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts depict how people in the 18 to 25 age group
watch
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television in Canada in 2009 and 2019. First of all, conventional TV
were
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was
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most famous for watching television programs in
the
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2009, with a
percentage
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of 34%. Following that, one-fifth of the programs were watched
in
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on
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laptop
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a laptop
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.
Similarly
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, both desktop computers and mobile phones
also
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sit near that number with only an insignificant margin difference of 2% and 5%, respectively. The least relevant device for watching television was
tablet
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a tablet
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, with only 5% of users. Flat-screen
TVs
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also
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had a low
percentage
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of usage,
although
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still achieving a higher
percentage
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than tablets, at 8%.
On the other hand
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, mobile phones and flat-screen
TVs
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raised
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in popularity in the following decade, rising to a
percentage
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slightly above one-quarter of all electrical appliances combined. Citizens were
also
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more interested in using tablets compared to the previously recorded data, surging up 14%.
However
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, the other three gadgets experienced a fall, with both laptops and desktop computers dipping down to only 12%,
while
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conventional
TVs
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plummeted to a mere 4%. To sum it all up, traditional
TVs
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were most famous in 2009 but lost
its
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their
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relevance in the next decade
due to
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people shifting their
preverences
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preferences
preference
towards more modern devices.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, tvs with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • percentage
  • proportion
  • comparison
  • device
  • traditional TV
  • laptop
  • mobile phone
  • tablet
  • streaming services
  • usage
  • trend
  • shift
  • technological advancements
  • viewing habits
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