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In many countries people do not recycle their rubbish as much as they do. Why do you think this is? What can be done to change this?

#countries #people #rubbish #change
All over the world
people
stop
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have stopped
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 recycling rubbish compared with the past,In my opinion,
That
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apply
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due to
 the lack of
undrstading
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understanding
 of the issues that
caused
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are caused
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 by it,
Also recycle
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Recycling
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 methods cost energy and money and
people
willing
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are willing
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 to save both,
Nowdays
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nowadays
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 there
is
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are
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 lack of awareness
however
people
wnat
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want
 to cure our environment they simply do not have a clue how? Here there
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are
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is
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 a turn for schools,
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and famous
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famous
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and famous
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celebirties
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celebrities
 to speak about the subject,If there were posters,shows,and essays we would
handle
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have handled
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 it
long
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a long
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 time ago,In first world countries
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, for example,
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for example
 the
Us
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US
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 or the
Uk
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UK
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 they have a
places
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place
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 for recycling and that push
people
 to recycle more,
However
 in a poorer countries civils struggle more and do not have
a
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apply
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time to think of recycling,It is a world
issues
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issue
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 that needs to
be solve
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be solved
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,If we so not every
humen
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human
 exist
suffer
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to suffer
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,Not only us even the animals and plants,Wich going to affect the daily life,It is not hard to recycle daily on contrary it is harder to live in a
harmfull
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harmful
 environment,
Also
 scientist need to invent a much cheaper
methods
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method
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 to recycle,Rubbish problem impact the biggest issue of our modern days the global warming,Surly if
people
 know that they going to recycle more.
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coherence correction
Your essay has clear points, but they need to be organized more logically. Consider using paragraphs to separate different ideas and arguments.
cohesion correction
Ensure each sentence flows smoothly to the next. Using transitional phrases will help guide the reader.
task achievement correction
You've introduced relevant points, but they require more development and explanation. Expand on each point and provide specific examples to support your arguments.
task achievement correction
Proofread your essay to correct spelling errors such as 'undrstading' (understanding), 'Wich' (which), and 'Surly' (surely). Proper spelling will improve readability and professionalism.
task achievement positive
Your essay attempts to deal with a current and important issue, showing awareness of environmental problems.
task achievement positive
You suggest practical solutions like education through schools and celebrities, which could indeed be effective.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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