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The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts illustrate the information about worldwide sales of the major five mobile phone brands from 2009 to 2014, with 2-tear intervals.
Overall
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, it. Can be seen that the number of people who bought mobile phones increased dramatically in Samsung and Apple.
Furthermore
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, ZTE elevated minimally over the given period,
while
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 the profits of mobile sales of Nokia and LG declined between 2009 and 2013.
However
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, Nokia was the most popular brand among others in 2009 with 4,200
million
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 units sold
then
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 decreased to just over 400
million
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, and significantly fell to 250
million
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 in 2013.
On the contrary
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, Samsung starting from 220
million
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, inclined gradually about 100
million
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 every two single years till 450
million
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 in 2013. In Summary, the highest rate of sales was occupied by Samsung and Nokia accounting for 450 and 420
million
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, respectively.
Whereas
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, the others remained just under 150
million
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at the end
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 of a given period.

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