The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart
illustrate
expenses from medium households between 1968 and 2018. Change the verb form
illustrates
Proportion
of spending in 1968 in the most of factors Add an article
The proportion
are
higher than Correct subject-verb agreement
is
2018
Change preposition
in 2018
besides
transport and leisure. It exhibits that consumers in 2018 tend to utilise more of their funds for their enjoyment such
as going abroad to other countries and staying in the hotel rather than home.
To begin
, the percentage of wage
spent on food diminished significantly from 35% to 17%. Fix the agreement mistake
wages
Similarly
, the fuel and power decreased by 6%. Furthermore
, less money went into clothing and footware
compared to 1968's.
Correct your spelling
footwear
However
, the chart for household good
stayed Fix the agreement mistake
goods
in
constant even though the Change preposition
apply
overal
income changed in 2018. Correct your spelling
overall
Moreover
, spending on housing increased dramatically about
12% between 1968 and 2018. Especially, consumption of Change preposition
by about
lesiure
by ordinary people soared Correct your spelling
leisure
suprisingly
. Correct your spelling
surprisingly
Lastly
, families preferred to pay more in the
proportion Correct article usage
apply
of
their total income on transport.Change preposition
to
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