The diagram below shows how rainwater is collected for the use of drinking water in an Australian town.

The diagram below shows how rainwater is collected for the use of drinking water in an Australian town.
The diagram illustrates the collection of rainwater for drinking usage in one Australian town.
Overall
, the process is composed of five steps, starting with collecting the rainwater and finishing by treating it with chemicals.
To begin
with, when it rains, raindrops
are gathered
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on the roof of each house, which slide down into the pipe at the side of each house,
then
goes
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down through it.
After
this
process, all the
water
collects at the main tube that transfers it to the
water
filter, to get rid of the dirt. After being filtered,
water
gets collected in a big storage
that is
connected
with
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the
water
treatment with a tube, where it gets treated with chemicals.
Finally
, all the small chemical substances differentiate from
water
and move to the pipe which will transfer them
the
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out of the cycle.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • rainwater harvesting
  • rooftops
  • drains and gutters
  • underground storage tanks
  • water treatment plant
  • purification
  • filtration
  • chemical treatment
  • impurities
  • microorganisms
  • distribution system
  • potable water
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