Bar graphs below provide information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2000 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2000 and 2010.

Bar graphs below provide  information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2000 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2000 and 2010.
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The bar graphs below provide details about the percentage of individuals who possess PC
as well as
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their level of education between 2000 and 2010. Units are measured in percentages.
Overall
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, laptop proprietorship showed an upward trend throughout the period
while
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ownership by education level saw a similar rise. Despite
this
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, the lowest number of persons that held
desktop
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was those with no high school diploma,
whereas
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the opposite was true with postgraduate degrees.
Initially
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, 50% of users purchased a notebook in 2000,
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more than 75% held one in 2010. The second most popular year for intellectual machine holding was 2008 with more than 76% owning one.
However
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, the percentage of computer custody in 2002 and 2004 was almost the same (60% and 65%, respectively). A noticeable trend showed that the higher the education level the higher the percentage of people having computers. Individuals with no high school diploma had the lowest rate
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computer
purchase
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, which was approximately 25%,
while
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people with postgraduate degrees had the highest number of computers which was well over 75%.
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