IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 5.5

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You are renting a flat from an agency. Your contract was for one year but you need to leave the flat two months early. Write a letter to the agency. In your letter * introduce yourself * ask to leave the flat before the contract finishes * explain why you need to break the contract.

#minutes #agency #contract #year #two #months
Good afternoon, dear sir/madam. My name is Anastassia, I'm the tenant in one of your flats. First of all, I wanted to express my
sencirely
Correct your spelling
sincerely
gratitudes
Fix the agreement mistake
gratitude
show examples
 for your help and wonderful work - yours' and your's staff.
Furthermore
, there was a great
pleasant
Replace the word
pleasure
show examples
 to get your help, and I have had 10 amazing months in
this
 flat.
Secondly
, I wanted you to know that I evaluated
you
Correct pronoun usage
your
show examples
agensy
Correct your spelling
agency
 with the best possible grade
in
Change preposition
on
show examples
 your website and
in
Change preposition
on
show examples
 the other social media.
Moreover
, I'd
recomended
Correct your spelling
recommend
recommended
 your agency to all my friends - students of your city's university. You are doing the best work.
Unfortunally
Correct your spelling
Unfortunately
, I have some family
issue
Fix the agreement mistake
issues
show examples
, and I have to break my contract and leave
to
Change preposition
for
show examples
 my country two months
befor
Correct your spelling
before
 the end of the contract. My contract is up to 1.8.2024.
I'm ask
Change the verb form
I'm asking
show examples
 you to help me one more time to get out without fees - my mom
have
Change the verb form
has
show examples
 to get surgery and it'll cost a lot for our family. I beg for your help Thanks a lot, best regards. Anastassia
Submitted by anastasia on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task achievement
There are several spelling and grammar mistakes that need correction. For example, 'sencirely' should be 'sincerely' and 'your's' should be 'your.' Attention to these details can enhance clarity.
coherence cohesion
While the overall structure is good, some paragraphs could be more focused. For instance, the first paragraph contains both gratitude and an evaluation. Split these ideas to improve clarity.
task achievement
Include a specific request for any official process required to break the contract without incurring fees, as this will make your request clearer and more professional.
coherence cohesion
The opening greeting and closing are polite and appropriate, showing good understanding of formal letter writing.
task achievement
The tone throughout the letter is respectful and appropriate for the situation, which strengthens the task achievement.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • lease agreement
  • contract termination
  • early exit
  • relocation
  • sublet
  • notice period
  • penalty clause
  • new tenant
  • agency fee
  • vacate
  • unforeseen circumstances
  • mutual agreement
What to do next:
Look at other essays: