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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The supplied line graph indicates the
number
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 of properties which
was
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were
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 moved in the United Kingdom by four various ways of transport over a
twenty six-year
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 period. A glance at the graph reveals that the
number
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 of stuff transported by road,water and pipeline had an upward
trend
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.
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,the proportion of
goods
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 which was brought in other areas by rail had some different changes over the period. In 1974,nearly 2
million
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tonnes
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goods
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of goods
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 were transported in the UK by pipeline.(Which was the least
number
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 of transportation over the whole year).After that,the
quantites
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quantities
quantity
 of stuff which
were
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was
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 moved by pipeline rocketed in the UK in 1982 and
then
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at the end
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 of the
trend
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,It remained unchanged with 20
million
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tonnes
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goods
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of goods
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 from 1994 to 2002.
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,approximately 70
million
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tonnes
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properties
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 were transported by road in the United Kingdom in 1974.Next,the percentage of moving
goods
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with
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by
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 road had an upward
trend
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 and hit the peak of the graph with roughly 98
million
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tonnes
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 in 2002.(Which was the highest
number
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 of
tranportation
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transportation
 over the period).
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,just under 40
million
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tonnes
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stuff
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of stuff
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 were brought by water in the UK in 1974.Afterwards,with some various changes,the
number
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 of
goods
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 which were transported by water reached just over 60
million
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tonnes
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 in 2002.Surprisingly,the quantities of
goods
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 moved
with
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by
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 rail was 40
million
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tonnes
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 in 1974.
Following
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this
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,
this
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 amount fluctuated from 1978 to 2002 and
then
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at the end
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 of the
trend
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 It reached again to just around
of
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40
million
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tonnes
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 in 2002.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, trend, goods, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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