You would like to rent a car for a holiday. Write to the car rental agency. In your letter • Explain what type of car you would like • Give details of when you would like the car • Request more information about the cost

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Dear sir, I would like to rent a car next week. I will travel with my family to the United States for five
week
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. My family have seven members
included
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my spouse, four children and a pet. We should arrive
to
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Chicago, IL on 12th October and we will
departue
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departure
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before
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December from Los Angeles, CA
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, we need
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a big space car, that has
to
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seven seats available, most
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it should one way rent. Do you have a
vain
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van
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, which is brand
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Toyota, is it possible latest model and young aged vehicle? Because
,
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our children
are need
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a more comfortable trip
while
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a way
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. I prefer
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a
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newest car. You can don't
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for
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my pet. she
get
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well training and she has full
accesories
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accessories
. Our flight
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would land at 12p.m, So should I check in
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, at 2p.m in
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O'Hare International
airport
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? How
many
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will be cost per day? We have to return it
in
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the LAX airport after five
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in the morning before at 9.00 a.m. Could you send me for email
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information
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some
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driver's
request
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and
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cost all
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included
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I am
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your
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. Thank you.
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coherence
When listing details like travel dates and times, ensure they are clearly and accurately described. Consider breaking complex sentences into simpler ones for clarity.
task response
Re-read the letter for grammatical errors and possible misunderstandings, especially in terms of specific requests like vehicle requirements and payment details.
task response
Good introduction of the purpose of the letter and clear mention of travel details such as dates and places.
coherence
The letter addresses various specific needs, i.e., number of seats, type of vehicle, timing, and comfort requirements, demonstrating attention to detail.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedan
  • SUV
  • convertible
  • GPS
  • child seats
  • air conditioning
  • pick-up and drop-off times
  • extended rental periods
  • one-way rentals
  • daily rental rates
  • insurance
  • deposits
  • additional charges
  • late returns
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