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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You are renting a flat from an agency. Your contract was for one year but you need to leave the flat two months early. Write a letter to the agency. In your letter * introduce yourself * ask to leave the flat before the contract finishes * explain why you need to break the contract.

#minutes #agency #contract #year #two #months
Dear Sir Johan, I am writing
this
 letter to inform you that I want to leave the flat next month. I present the details in
this
 letter. In the beginning, my name is Rabeb. I'm the teacher
how
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who
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rent
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rents
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the
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apply
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flat number 2 on the second floor , near the
faculty
 of business administration.
Alose
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Also
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, I lived at
this
 flat on 30 August 2023 and my contract will finish on 30 July 2024.
Moreover
, I want Lo
leave
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to leave
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 the flat on 15 May because I have my reasons.
Then
, I will leave the flat before the contract finishes. And I ask you Sir to permit for me to leave. Indeed, I mentioned in the beginning that I'm a teacher. In
this
 context, the administration of my
faculty
inform
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informs
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 me that she
need
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needs
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 my help
in
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with
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 the second
faculty
 in
other city
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another city
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. As
result
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a result
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, I need to stay
full time
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full-time
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 in the other city.
Consequently
,
I'm oblige
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 to search
a
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for a
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new flat near the new
faculty
.
Finally
, I hope
gratefully
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you gratefully
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to
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apply
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accept my apology for
the
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apply
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leaving the flat before the contract finishes and I
wait
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wait for
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 your response to my request. Yours Sincerely Rabeb
Submitted by rabebhamdi on

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph clearly conveys one main idea to avoid confusion. This will improve the logical flow of your letter.
coherence cohesion
Polish the introduction and conclusion of the letter. While they are good, they could be slightly more informative to make your request clearer.
task achievement
Clarify your reasons for leaving in a more straightforward manner. This will help make your task response stronger and more compelling.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing of the letter are polite and appropriate, contributing to a respectful tone.
task achievement
The letter effectively addresses the task requirements by introducing yourself, stating your request and explaining your reasons.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • lease agreement
  • contract termination
  • early exit
  • relocation
  • sublet
  • notice period
  • penalty clause
  • new tenant
  • agency fee
  • vacate
  • unforeseen circumstances
  • mutual agreement
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