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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The plans below show the site of an airport now and how itwill look after redevelopment nextyear. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting themain features,and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given maps compare
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 of an airport between the present and after redevelopment next year.
Overall
, in the redevelopment, the airport will be enlarged to provide more gate and service facilities than the present. Clearly, the entrance of departures and arrivals will be all increased to 2 next year, rather than only 1 entrance at present. The cafe in the departures will
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 to the left side and its original site will be placed for Check-in. The position of Check-in will be added
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Bag drop. In the redevelopment of arrivals, a cafe, ATM and Car hire will be added to its right side. The passport control, customs and security will remain as same as the present, the shops will be constructed at the upper of security. The arrangement of gates will
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 to be a shape like "Y", the number of
gate
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 will rise from 8 to 18.
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walk way
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 to the gates will be replaced by the Sky train.
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clarity
Revise the sentence 'The cafe in the departures will be remove to the left side and its original site will be placed for Check-in.' for clarity. Consider: 'The cafe in departures will be moved to the left side, and the original site will be replaced by the Check-in counter.'
conclusion
Improve the conclusion to better summarize the main changes and impacts. Add a statement reflecting the overall improvement or functionality.
specific examples
Provide more specific examples to illustrate the changes clearly and check for grammatical errors, particularly verb tense and subject-verb agreement.
comparison
The essay effectively identifies and compares main features, including the increase in the number of gates and the additional services.
structure
Good use of organizational structures to show before-and-after differences.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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